Thursday, October 27, 2011
The End; a Beginning
Based on a prompt over at dversepoets.com, I am attempting a poem using conflation. A version of this poem was written when I was going through panic disorder and was finally fed up with being terrified all the time. I recently found someone's "cheat" notes, written on small pieces of paper, outside of a local school and decided to combine the two ideas. I'm not sure if it works, but I'm submitting it for this challenge.
The End; a Beginning
Plot: series of events
that make a story.
Watch the knife,
split the flesh.
Foreshadowing: clues to
what will happen later.
Crack the bone,
pierce the heart.
Internal conflict: between
protagonist and her feelings.
Shed the blood
like waves of scarlet demons,
causing my heart to pound
hard against it's cage,
hard-wiring my terror.
Climax: the most exciting part.
If I am so afraid to die,
die now-
at your own hand.
Resolution: the ending;
show how conflict is resolved.
Release the demons,
expire the breath,
still the heart,
end the torment.
Plot: series of events
that make a story.
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wow. i really like this...it is different...i like the blend of definition and example but also the woven story...well done..
ReplyDeleteAmazing piece. I'm a screenwriter so I love the angle you took here. Great combination, use of the d'verse prompt. Really, really enjoyed the read. Thanks
ReplyDeleteI agree. Definitely conflation. Packaged creatively and poetically. This piece signals you got skills. Nice!
ReplyDeleteWhat a totally cool way to address the prompt! I love it! :-D
ReplyDeleteVery creative way of weaving both realities....
ReplyDeletea fine example ~
That was fantastic and raw and yet strangely romantic.
ReplyDeleteVery cool; each side relieves and highlights the extreme of the other.
ReplyDeleteThis was a perfect blend of two different styles complimenting each other. I LOVED it. This was amazing.
ReplyDeletedang - this is powerful
ReplyDeleteWatch the knife,
split the flesh.
...
Crack the bone,
pierce the heart....very effective..like gun shots in the quiet..
Creative and interesting write! Thank you.
ReplyDeleteUnique, creative, and an awesome way to take the challenge and run with it. My head is still reeling from the many varied and assorted definitions I've found...but not too much to not enjoy a fantastic write.
ReplyDeletei love this plot outline concept...too cool
ReplyDeleteOh, wow. I loved this! It's so different, but it really works. =3
ReplyDeleteClever stuff and it does work!
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
This is really powerful. What a fantastic response to the prompt!
ReplyDeleteWow. The Cliff Notes to acute distress.
ReplyDeleteI may have to try this method...
This worked really well. The notes add a nice irony which somehow makes the emotional lines even stronger.
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